Again, I like it. I take it that Sasha and Gabi have already arrived at Stohess, having booked a hotel there. So, why not have them explore the town and the landscape in Part 3? Though, there are a lot of surprises that hit me, like the camping trip. So, I would like the order of events to go roughly like this: Sasha and Gabi having a conversation answering Gabi's question, then for tomorrow, dropping off by that Academy (Maybe Gabi will go here, even if for a while, considering she's supposed 18 in this story), then exploring the town, then heading off to a spot along the coast, and the camping, and the rest of the trip, can end up at chapter 4, where Sasha and Gabi can bond, and . In chapter 3, there is to be another Bluey reference, as well as the flashback to when Gabi babysat those kids and first came across Bluey.
We'll you know what, I'm actually debating whether or not I want the story's part count to be increased from 5 to 7, since I'm no longer so sure if 5 chapters are enough to adequately go into the story in the detail I want to see. Like, there are a lot of stuff just added in with flashback in the second character, when I had originally wanted to see chapters 2 through 4 be dedicated to Sasha and Gabi visiting and exploring that seaside town of Stohess (barring the fact that Stohess is canonically one of 12 districts of the 3 circular walls, located on the east side of Wall Sina, where Annie crystallised and was captured, but I digress). Plus, the more I read the story, the more I want to learn about the world the both of us have concocted here, even if it's not supposed to be the main focus of the story.
Again, the only thing I'd change of the story is address the need for spelling and grammatical corrections, there are quite a few in there so far.
