@LucaBeast13 Hey Beast, thanks for your comments. About somethings. Yes, I can understand about that ‘delivery part’. But we wanna show the main character as the like most common person you can find on Earth. No sudden powers after seeing the world, or heck even before seeing the world. That’s why that part of required. And will be many small-small things. Like in OC Description. In like, Selena and her Family are written differently. Cause, you can love Selena like your own daughter, but you can’t love her family with same feeling. Hope you understand I mean.
About overpowering Ash. Yeah, they are boring, we wanted to show that Ash somehow won the battle. It was not a fluke, it wasn’t easy. But he just wins.
About cheesiness, well. I am cheesy. And I guess other 3 are too? *sweat drop*
And about the move to ask the author to read book. Well, it’s like a not wattpad friendly move, cause it then stop you for sending same messages to anyone who you don’t follow and we don’t wanna just follow people to message and unfollow again for like some hours. But yeah, it’s one way. Cause our book is also in this Pokémon Fanfiction flood. If we wanna get noticed by readers. We would need to do something.
Take care!!