morfusmax1
Hi...Made a couple edit suggestions in Return of the Gods and realized I hadn't asked first if you wanted them. Bit of a habit of mine. Want me to continue?
dragonthusiast
@morfusmax1 not at all, I've had no luck finding an audience, but I can't say I tried very hard to find it either
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morfusmax1
@dragonthusiast Intended style. Cool. I'll stop commenting on the tense issues, then. BTW, I see you're also on Royal Road. How's that working out?
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dragonthusiast
@morfusmax1 thanks for the input, no one likes Alor so that's fair. I actually disagree with your point about tense here, though. If I was writing reported speech, you'd be perfectly correct, but this is a fiction story written in 3rd person limited focusing on a character experiencing things. I would actually find it stranger to avoid saying "now" and "this" and so on. If this is wrong according to grammar, I don't mind being wrong for the sake of vibes
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