OC Reviews

1. Hawk

Hawk is a charakter submitted by @Leav-The-Willow. Now let's have a look, shall we?
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Fandom: Wings of Fire

Ok so I don't know much about this fandom but I've read enough Wikipedia-articles (I hope) to review this one correctly. (:

Name: Hawk

Aliases: Eagle, Owl, Nobody

Naming is appropriate, I like it. Is the "Nobody" inspired by Homers' 'Odyssey'? If yes, I like your style ;). I suggest using that name only when the other dragon/person can know that this isn't her real name, but this is optional as it still is acceptable as a name.

Age: 10

An adult OC, also good. (I've heard that many OCs are relatively young, so I'm gonna go and say that this is good :P)

Gender: Female

Tribe: Skywing

Appearance: Hawk is an orangish red color mostly throughout her body, the exception being yellow freckles on her face and neck. She has a large amount of scars on her body, but the most prominent are where her wings should've been

Colouration fits, probably a little simple but still good, scars also acceptable. I say this because she has a military background where it isn't unlikely to be wounded. *nodding*

Accessories: Hawk commonly wears a muddy brown cloak, which makes it harder to identify her and the fact that she's wingless.

Reasonable, as the cloak would be (besides the "emotional shield" of hiding the fact that she doesn't have wings) a physical shield, because wounds that big would lead to much scar tissue which might be a little sensitive to contact. I only have two things: how exactly would a dragon wear a cloak (for my interpretation see the picture above)? And where do they get the material? X] I mean I know nothing about this fandom but didn't find anything about this, and as far as I know they don't trade with humans... but I'll have to trust you on that one. It's gonna be okay (I hope)

Personality: Calm, Serious, Responsible, Manipulative, Battle-Intelligent, Quiet, Short-Tempered, Defensive, Sentimental

Her personality contradicts itself I think. :I7 If she's calm she can't really be short-tempered, and responsibility is a very sharp contrast to manipulative... or it isn't, if she's responsible BY manipulating people on the regular... what do I know, I can't really tell from her backstory. What is the case? Other than that, it's believable, one who was raised in a harsh environment can be like that.

Disability: She hatched with extremely deformed wings to the point where the wings would've had to be cut off to prevent her from suffering.

The thing with the wings... I don't really know what to say about it. I think it can happen, so imma give it a go, though it maybe is difficult to make things work with a tribe whose members are most experienced in the air. I believe in you; in your story it can make sense if you play your cards right. :D

Likes: Feeling Safe, Starry Nights, The smell of dew, the little things.

That sounds believable, I think everyone likes being safe. Maybe a few more, so that she gains more personality traits, even if it's just small ones.

Dislikes: Dragonets, Sudden loud noises, Sleeping, Reminders of dragonet hood

Also good, she is a good character overall. Why exactly doesn't she like sleeping? Does she feel hunted and therefore always wants to know what is going on? But as I said, mainly good and believable characteristics.